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Sunday, March 10, 2013

Weekend Writing Warriors - WIP New York Minute #8Sunday


Another weekend and another 8 sentences from my WIP, New York Minute. I will continue where I left off. If you need to read last week's 8, which is the beginning of the WIP, click HERE.



Chloe pulled Veronica tighter. “Speed dating is different than a regular bar atmosphere.”
“Have you done this before?”
“Never with you.” They walked another block and Chloe stopped in front of the Aria Lounge, her hands held out like a showgirl. 
Other women grouped up in the entrance, pretty women, dressed for success ... or sex. Veronica looked down at her simple black dress and green fitted jacket with a swooshy scarf around her neck, and wished she wore something else. All these other ladies had low cut blouses, too-tight pants, or short skirts that didn’t leave too much to the imagination. Veronica looked -- blah.
“Chloe, I don’t want to do this.”


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11 comments:

  1. Ahhh...I love a heroine who's afraid of speed dating. I wrote one myself. Can't wait to see what happens next.

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  2. I don't blame her. Great job. I tweeted.

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  3. Oh, speed dating! Love that idea. Great 8!

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  4. Aww, hehe. I feel for her. Great snippet!

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  5. I can't imagine speed dating. It'll be interesting how you handle this.

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  6. Too late now! Will be interesting to see how this unfolds - excellent excerpt!

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  7. Excellent. I can hardly wait to read more. In just a few sentences, you've done a great job of showing Veronica's insecurity as she compared herself to other women. Great way to get the reader to relate. Most of us have done that, I'm sure--compare ourselves to others--so sure we come up short. :-)

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  8. Your building the tension week to week. Do it. Don't do it. Do it. Don't do it. Can't wait to see where this goes.

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  9. Scary situation to find herself in. Dating is such a shocker. Great eight.

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  10. I have felt exactly that way. You really captured the emotion.

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  11. Enjoyed the 8 from this week and last!

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